No one believes me they think I'm lying but it's really true I a big hairy monster lives under my bed and I can prove it because I can hear scratching under my bed and deep breathing and at night I hear me do see me and his mouth chomping really loud I can never get to sleep though I really annoys me I did my mum to check on the my bed I told her heaps but she doesn't believe
me then I beg you even more and she still doesn't she thinks monsters are real this time I really want to do believe me And I can never get to sleep what night I did that I woke up and I was right there I didn't see it face so all I thought was back big hearing Brownfield I was really scared I went under my blankets I was so afraid I nearly peed my pants. All of a sudden there was another monster under my bed this one is way
Mīharo Ezra, I like the way you've structured this piece of writing into paragraphs. The picture explains it all, ataahua. Next time could you look at more full stops in your sentences and a detailed description of what your monster could look like in your imagination. He kaha koe ki te tuhituhi nōtemea you are persistent at completing your work. Ka rawe.
ReplyDeletereally nice work but maybe next time you could re read and fix up your punctuation
ReplyDeleteNice work Ezra i like how you structured it into paragraphs.I like your perspective on how you described yourself being scared
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